Hi, I'm trying to figure out if my thesis statement is okay to start with. My thesis statement will include how mothers are being shackled during the birthing process in jails and prisons. My thesis statement is: During the birthing process an incarcerated mother shouldn't have to be shackled. This can be traumatizing and become a lawsuit because anything can happen during the birth of a child. Is this a good thesis or should I try again?

Hi, I'm trying to figure out if my thesis statement is okay to start with. My thesis statement will include how mothers are being shackled during the birthing process in jails and prisons. My thesis statement is: During the birthing process an incarcerated mother shouldn't have to be shackled. This can be traumatizing and become a lawsuit because anything can happen during the birth of a child. Is this a good thesis or should I try again?